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rock and/or roll
City of Bummers
About 10 years in the writing, here's a lazy folky summer thing for you. Might add some sfx/synth. Notes always welcome. Lyrics inside.
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Cookie-crumb crook caught: hand in the jar. Pause for laughter and applause. Mugging and shrugging for cameras lined up like a firing squad.
It's an old bit, but it kills so keep killing it. Kicked sole's worn thin. If it fits, well shit: it's just the type you're cast in. So do it again.
Free-form magician, all smoke and mirrors, making it all disappear. Cold-call turned long-con. Everyone cheers. Hey, what's that behind your ear?
It's an old bit, kicked souls: worn thin.
City of bummers. It ain't a joke. Not when you ain't got a smoke. "Tell us another!" Fuck it. I'm broke. Come on now. Who's got a smoke?
posted by es_de_bah on Jul 03, 2024 at 5:47 PM
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I really like this a lot. Nice songwriting, song structure, dynamics, and lyrics!
posted by willc at 9:38 AM
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The combination of your tightly braided and alliterative lyrics, your voice and your melodies that unspool from the cadence of the lines--it's all verypleasing.
Cookie-crumb crook caught is a full-on tongue twister that sucked me in to the song. Post more!
posted by umbú at 8:57 AM
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hah! That line is a good example of why I take too long to finish projects. Why do I set up songs like I'm trying to make it harder for myself? Always appreciate the feedback, umbú.
posted by es_de_bah at 5:20 AM
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